22 Jul 2015

raider


When her eyes glittered with crystalline tears, his own eyes were dry as he pretended not to be the reason she was crying. When she fell into the chasm, his arms were not long enough to reach her. When her chest almost stopped rising and her breath almost stopped flowing, he was gone, long distances away. She was left, counting the times he'd let her down.

and now he's back, and asking to stay,
but she knows she can't let the same
person who broke down the walls of
her heart in again, because her soul
is just barely patched now, and
she has found somebody else
who wants to make her feel whole
once more, and she cannot tear 
down the gates she's just built
to let a raider in.

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[Raider; synonyms: attacker, assailant, robber, burglar, thief, housebreaker, plunderer, pillager, looter, marauder, ransacker, sacker, invader.]

20 comments:

  1. I just want to give this girl a hug <3
    Wonderful writing, Tane. It brings forth so much emotion.

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    1. I know, it's dramatic, right? But I was in the mood for drama. Thank you so much, Jordz♥

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  2. Taaaannnnnne. Tane. I can't, this is just so beautiful. How is everything you do so stunning? Seriously though, all of your writing moves me so much. I'm always wishing I could remember it forever. <3

    xo
    Madi

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    1. Says YOU. But, thanks, my darling, that's so sweet of you to say. xxx

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  3. Oh, wow! This is amazing! Good job! :)

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  4. I want to cry along side the girl; I really empathize with her pain. :/

    xoxo Morning

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    1. Awh. Thanks, Morning. :) I'm glad it made you feel.

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  5. woah, tane. that was amazing.
    and you took that picture? you are one talented girl ^_^

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    1. Thank you very much, Autumn ;) Yes, I did.

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  6. Your style of writing is unique! I adore it!
    Vanessa

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  7. Ah I love this - the writing and the photo x

    -M
    The Life of Little Me

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  8. Ok. WOW. This is actually amazing. Please keep writing, as I know you will. You have the opportunity to have such an impact on so many people's lives. Keep being you, Tane.

    xoxo
    MaryShelley

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    1. Ok. MARY. You are so sweet and you have so encouraged me, because I was feeling like this post was a flop, an ugly mess, and your comment has just made it so much better and thank you.

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  9. TANE. this. was. absolutely. stunning.
    i. can't. get. over. how. intense. it. is.

    <3<3<3

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    1. You know, that's how I feel about every writing piece of yours. <3 Thanks, Elisa!

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  10. This. I want to cry. You have no idea the feelings I have with this writing piece. Keep going. <3

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